Fire works
Boom kaboom I was watching the fireworks.as I lit the fireworks I felt happy. They shooted through the sky as they exploded. They looked like raining colorful drops. We lit the next one boom !!!!!!!!!!!!!!. The fireworks moved like a torpedo through the air. It was the best night ever. From Lewis.
Fantastic writing Lewis! I love the descriptive words you have used like 'raining colourful drops' and 'moved like a torpedo'.
ReplyDeleteMiss Taylor :-)
I like all of your speech and all of the onomatopoeia Lewis.
ReplyDeletehey Lewis
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said "The fireworks moved like a torpedo through the air." that put a really vivid picture in my head. I thought that it was great that you put in some onomatopoeia. perhaps next time you could add more detail to how you felt.